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Saturday, November 04, 2006

Smoking should be prohibited in public places
Smoking is always harmful to the people. You smoke in a public or you smoke at your home, it has dangerous effect on the body. The person should not allow to smoke in public. Firstly, the non smoking people in the public places may not feel comfortable with the smoke. A person is smoking in a restaurant, and the person sitting on next table may not like the smoke. Secondly, smoking is even bad for the other people in the public. Smoke is harmful to the children. Pregnant women can have premature baby. Finally, second hand smoking is worse for the people who don’t smoke. For example, a person Is smoking. The smoke enters in the body of the other person sitting next to him, and it harmful to him. That person can feel difficulty in breathing or he might have lung cancer. We can only find a side effects, when a person smoke in a public. In conclusion, smoking should be prohibited in public.

1 Comments:

Blogger John said...

You have written a strong paragraph for prohibiting smoking in public places. Your argument moves well from uncomfortable to unhealthy with the strongest point at the end of the paragraph. You make good use of general examples to support your points.

Your paragraph has a few verb problems. For example, "The person should not allow to smoke in public." This sentence is in a passive form, since the people who should not allow it are not mentioned in the sentence. The sentence should read: "The person should not be allowed to smoke in public."

In this clause, "it harmful to him," you have left out the verb -- is. It should read: "it is harmful to him."

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